Exercise 4: Write two more sentences to expand and explain each of the five (six, in my case) opposing sentences from Exercise 3.
1. Hevel looks up to his older brother, but chose a different path. Whereas Kayin chose to be an architect and farmer, Hevel chose to be a hunter and scout. Even after their separate careers were chosen, though, Hevel continues to seek Kayin’s advice on life in general.
Opposed: Recently, Hevel has started to realize just how different their lives are, and how much he can’t go to his brother for advice on. Matters concerning hunting generally garner a blank stare, and Hevel isn’t about to broach the subject of possibly leaving Freepass to marry a foreign girl with his religious brother. Hevel still uses Kayin as a sounding board and to vent frustrations, but is saddened that their connectedness isn’t the same as when they were younger.
2. Hevel is a dedicated follower of his people’s god, though he believes faith is a private matter. Part of his enjoyment of his hunting profession is the excuse it gives him to skip various “required” religious meetings (though there are special holidays that even he cannot avoid). Even so, he prays daily and feels he is closer to his god than most of those who attend regular worship.
Opposed: The new priestess has noticed his absence, and has made it her personal mission to attend regular services. She has started holding prayer meetings before and after each hunting expedition (to bless the hunters and food, respectively), which adds a whole new religious meeting he must attend. Many are attributing the increase in the hunts to this practice, causing more people to attend these events, which is increasing Hevel’s unease at them.
3. Charisma and a head for tactics helped Hevel during his term in the militia. He advanced through the scouts, and eventually earned the rank of Lieutenant of the South Wall at an unprecedented age. Before he left the service, everyone assumed he would stay in and become the next Captain of the Guard.
Opposed: His abrupt departure from the militia left him with several enemies, most notably the current Captain of the Guard. Captain Tzidkiyahu thought of Hevel as a son, and took it as a personal slap in the face when Hevel left the service. Hevel thought of Captain “Zid” as a father, himself, and feels as if this is the second father he’s lost (since his biological father died when he was still a baby).
4. After his term in the militia was over, Hevel took up the profession of hunter. Even here, Hevel has distinguished himself as a leader, having led several expeditions to hunt some of the more fearsome beasts in the mountains. Still, when Hevel feels the need to think deeply upon important matters, he always chooses to hunt alone.
Opposed: Lately, the prey from the south has been more plentiful…and more ferocious. Most of Freepass is exuberant about the increase in fresh meat, but the hunters are worried about what might be driving them north. Besides, with all of the preferred prey, many predators have also come north, making the hunts more dangerous.
5. Hevel is notorious for his mischievous nature, but rarely gets in trouble. His pranks are good natured, and his charming smile gets him out of whatever small amount of trouble his pranks get him into. Most often, he talks his brother and friends into aiding him in his mischief-making.
Opposed: Even though they’ve often been amused by his pranks in the past, the people of Freepass are starting to grumble. Many feel that the solution is for Hevel to get married and settle down, and the young women have certainly tried to convince him of this. Not wanting to lead anyone on, Hevel hasn’t acquiesced, and has instead returned to the wilderness to hunt more often.
6. The love of Hevel’s life was a foreign girl named Alina, who lived in the town itself. It is forbidden to marry a foreigner, so their love affair was kept secret. Foreigners are given a five year pass to live inside the town, and must leave to their respective country thereafter; it has been over four years since she departed.
Opposed: As is often the case amongst family business interests in Freepass, Alina’s father was replaced with her Uncle, who has been smuggling the lovers’ letters back and forth. He has agreed to take Hevel back with him, and even give him a job in the family business. Hevel still hasn’t decided whether to give up the life he knows for the woman he loves, but the decision will have to be made soon…
Exercise 5 is basically Exercises 1-4 all in one for a second character (I’ll be using Kayin, Hevel’s brother). So while there are still many exercises left that will include and expand upon the first character, for now, it’s time to set aside Hevel and focus on Kayin. 🙂